I am suddenly dragged to my feet. Usually when this happens it means I will get a small meal or a bathroom break. Not this time. Someone in black unties my hands but it doesn’t matter because I can’t move them anyway. The person yanks me toward the door, which is open. I can’t tell if it is day or night. I never got to see the outside of this building because when I arrived I had been knocked out.
We are in the middle of a field. There is so much grass everywhere, every direction I look. There are no power lines or cell towers or any other people besides me and the man who kidnapped me. It is dawn and I am surrounded by an ocean of grass and pale pink shy.
The man lets go of my arm. I don’t know if I should run and I don’t even know if I can run now. The man seems to be waiting for something so I start walking. The man grunts something to himself and reaches into his coat pocket.
I’ve seen this before. I know what’s about to happen from every crime and horror TV show I’ve ever watched. Voices, hissing like tiny snakes all around me, tell me to run. So I do. I run and run until
The man puts his gun back into his pocket. The job is done and he feels no regret. A weight has been lifted from his shoulders. He turns, climbs into his car, and drives away.
NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOW COULD YOU KILL YOURSELF???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I was waiting to see if anything good happened. Then you killed the main character, and since it's in first perspective, I think you killed yourself. Nice story though. Why did the kidnapper kidnap if he was just going to kill the kid anyway?
ReplyDeletei'm so sad your story is over!!!! i wish there was more, and i am sad it has a sad ending. :(
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good story. It was very suspenseful and descriptive! I loved it!
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good story. It was very suspenseful and descriptive! I loved it!
ReplyDeleteWOW! That was extremely unexpected. When I first read this I was like Willa, my jaw dropped and I went NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????? WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????? It CAN'T BE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteYour story was really good and descriptive, even though the ending was abrupt and unexpected. I like how you slowly build up the tension through the story.